burning_nova (burning_nova) wrote in jackxianto,

Opinions needed

Hello! I'm writing a piece a bit on the side but I'm having trouble deciding which beginning is better. It's essentially a COE fix-it reincarnation fic but I need to know which intro sounds better. Currently just a chapter exists outside the two intros but how the story progresses depends on the introduction so I'd like some help. What are you opinions on them?

Disclaimer: I don't own Torchwood in any shape or form.
Rating: PG
Note: John is Ianto since Ianto is a diminutive form of Ifan (John). The family's suppose to be American so thus John and not Ifan or Ianto as the choice of name.
First Beginning

Second Beginning

They're both in one entry but they link to each start.
Tags: fanfic

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